Hey guys it is Casey back here again after oh so long. anyway this is just an exam practice that my classmates have to read and critique so nothing special
In both of these texts, We are presented with different interpretations of New Zealand, one bad and one hopeful. The first text, we are the tenants, has a very distinctly dreadful feeling like it is old and withered past its prime. The interpretation in the Limestone excerpt is one of hopefulness with the POV character longing to be there. These two texts also come from the perspectives of two very different types of people, In we are the tenants, it is an immigrant. In the Limestone excerpt, it is someone of the middle class. These are two very different perspectives on the same subject which in this case is how they view New Zealand. We are the tenants presents New Zealand in a very dark and dreadful tone almost like it is a place that you really do not want to go unless you are absolutely desperate. From the limestone excerpt, it is presented almost as a utopia of the 21st century that seems too good to be real but it is real.
These contrasting viewpoints present a duality that exists in nearly every country on earth. There are good parts and there are bad parts. It also shows that you are really only going to get whichever based on your income. The Immigrant in We are the tenants lives in a place that could be called a slums type area and they do not have the money to afford housing that most middle-class people have.
Anyway I will see you all in the next post bye bye.
Hey Casey, good job on having paragraphs and the correct structure. I'm not really sure you answered the question though as you don't talk about arriving or departing at all you just talk about how the author feels now they are in New Zealand. You also need to remember to add techniques as you don't talk about them at all in this. you also are not critical in your view of the texts, you don't make any links to wider wold either, and I don't think you talk about the what how or why. however I do think your treatment of the texts was very even so well done on that. just another thing to do next time would be putting the titles of the text in italic so we know that is the title. I think other than those things it is pretty good well done!
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Casey
ReplyDeleteI think you did well considering the time given however I do think you could explain your thoughts a little more and try and unpack the techniques you're using. I also think that mentioning the directors and your views on them (Being critical) will also help elevate your writing.
Well done on answering the question as well but I think that you did it a little too broadly and it will do you some good to mention the question in your introduction. Overall this was good and I think it is a great starting point. :)